I enjoyed this short story. There is very good imagery here, almost like I'm watching these events happen. I like how the author jumps from Dean's point of view (POV) to Sam's. The transitions are a little shotty, but pretty good nevertheless. I am a fan of Supernatural, and I think you've nailed it right on in revealing emotion. I can almost see this as a scene on the show, although we all know Dean probably isn't going to die, just like Sam died and came back, right? Anyway, good story.

this doesnt sound like dean at ALL! in fact it hardly sounds like even sam would be that teary and sappy. u gotta keep the characters and their personalities in check when u write about someone else's writing. u have to imagine the character as a real person with his own way of thinking and u cant let ur thoughts become theirs.