I have to agree with the other two reviewers. While the idea is good, it was very rushed and it didn't really end so much as just stop. It feels that there should be much more to it. I understand that there's a character limit, but 15,000 characters is about three pages (or longer), so you had plenty left over to work with.

Still, it was a good effort. I did like the monster. Very creative, and definitely something a young child might dream up.

Your descriptions are strong and I loved the idea, and that brought me into the story. A young kid's dreams can be wild and hairy, but this piece felt like an excerpt - the main character does go into the brother's dream and help, but just as quickly as the dream happened, it was over and the main character blacks out - it didn't feel resolved. Also the second paragraph probably could have been broken up into smaller chunks to make it easier to read.

I got to the end, and looked for the "next page" button.

What's there is nicely done (though it could have used a few paragraph breaks in the main chunk of text, especially to read on a screen)...but not really complete. I think it would be much improved if you rounded it off with her waking up, possibly having a discussion with the little brother in the real world.

I did think it was a nice depiction of a six year old's dream, though. They don't all have to be dark and complex. And I loved the idea of the real monster turning into a cartoon version when it was killed.