Nice little poem. Not depressing, though, in my opinion. It looks like one of those turning point moments, when after being tired of things for so long, you are ready for change. :-)

These are all pretty good. Even if you aren't an anime fan, they fit into general life, too! And all of them would make really nifty story titles.

I think the one thing that really makes this story stand out from the crowd is its ability to pull the reader into the environment with the abundance of descriptive text. By allowing me to visualize what's going on, I was able to get the most out of the story.

On another note, the lack of contractions gives the dialogue a certain flair that you don't see in most fan fiction. It's a bit hard to describe, but it kind of gives you an idea of the setting.

Tahira's behavior really spoke to me. Despite her illness, she wants to work alongside Altair. She's gutsy, selfless, and down-to-earth all at the same time. I guess having an OFC be the love interest of a canon character isn't necessarily a kiss of death (no pun intended).

Aside from the occasional punctuation or grammatical error, the only real flaw is that there's no real plot. It just seems to go on and on without any real idea of the situation at hand. Maybe I'm just being nitpicky.

Anyway, this was a good read, and I look forward to finding out what happens next.

WHAT? I spent all that time to read it, and there's just a "to be continued"? Well, it should be contiuned then! Trinity Blood was a good anime, and you have a good story surrounding that world. It'll be interesting to see more. Good job!