Thanks for commenting! I did fix those errors....sorry about that. I'll have the next part up tonight.

This is a little short, but intriguing. I'm looking foward to more.

Your grammar and spelling on the whole are good, but I have a few quibbles. In the summary do you mean that she is psychotic (mentally ill) or psychic? They would be easy words to confuse. If it were me, I'd never use 'u' instead of 'you', that's just an abbreviation. It's OK for chat speak, but not in a story. "We exist for a higher purpose then joining the circus", that should be *than* not *then*. (Bet you can't tell I'm an editor, LOL!)

I'm looking foward to how you develop your original character. Writing one well is not always an easy task. Thanks for adding another "Hellboy" story to the roster.

Thanks, Beth

P.S. I love your description of his gun being the size of a civil war cannon. Very apt.